【IELTS寫作範例】- 職業Career

By Terence Lau


Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid vast sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do.

  • How far do you agree?
  • What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?

It is true that people are paid differently based on their occupations. I do not agree that people who work in entertainment industry and management should earn a lot more money than front line workers. 

In my opinion, nurses, doctors, and teachers certainly have an essential role in society. Nurses and doctors hold various responsibilities such as taking care of a patient, bringing them back to health and undergoing serious pressure in their job such as performing surgery on a patient. Teachers are another role that influences many people in society. Their responsibilities include teaching children essential subjects such as Mathematics, English and Social Studies and shaping the future of these children by teaching them subjects they could be passionate about, and what they would like to do with their future careers. In that way, they shape the youngest generation which could influence our future. 

Even though these important roles exist, they are paid incredibly less than actors and athletes. This is not to say these careers are not essential. Actors and athletes hold a vital role in the entertainment industry. Entertainment like this is a great way to give audience a balance of downtime after a long day of work. This could range from watching a TV show or movie with your favourite actor or watching the upcoming sports game.

In conclusion, although all these careers hold great importance in society, I think the significance and influence of medical and teaching professions should be valued and receiving high incomes should be justified

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1. 此篇範文中有許多高分單字和片語(紅字們)

2. 作者透過真實生活中職業的責任及影響來支持自己的看法,對於現存社會積習已久的不平


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